Tuesday: Writing Task

This is my Writing

On a Saturday night with a beautiful sunset me and my
friend paulah went to go swim with some West Indian
Manatee. First we put on our swimming togs. Then we
skipped our way to the water. We could already see
some West Indian Manatee.  We could hear a nice
breeze. It was going through our hair. There was a
beautiful splashing noise which was the waves and the
changing tide. I could feel the cold water and the
seaweed between my toes. While we were swimming
with the West Indian Manatee, I felt a light touch
to my arm under the water. I tried to hold my breath
under the water to see what it was, and what I saw
was amazing to look at. It was a West Indian Manatee
touching my arm. When I got back up to the top of the
water I saw that Paulah  already had a friend which was
a West Indian Manatee.

This is my recreation with Legacy and Jin

On Saturday night, my friend Paulah and I sat under a
blanket of warmth which streamed down from the
setting sun. In the distance we saw the grey back
of what we could only assume was some different
kind of mammal. It looked a bit like a mermaid!
With excitement, we looked at each other and
realised we had the same idea. We pulled our togs
quickly out of our bags and whipped them on! Then
we skipped our way to the water.

We could hear a fresh calming breeze and it was
flowing gently through our hair. There was a beautiful
splashing noise which was the waves and the changing
tide. I could feel the cold water and the seaweed
squelched between my toes. 

Suddenly the mermaid-like creature surrounded us. 

I could feel a light swift movement brush over my arm.
I tried to hold my breath under the water to see what
it was, and what I saw was amazing to look at. It was
a West Indian Manatee touching my arm.

face. At once, I knew that she had also seen the
beautiful creature that I had just witnessed.

When I came back up for air I saw that Paulah had a
massive grin that had spread across her face. At once, I knew that she had also seen the beautiful creature that I had just witnessed.

I did more telling in the first story and more showing in the second peace of Writing Remember to show not tell in your Writing

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Legacy http://peslegacys.blogspot.com/

The Deep Sea

Blue Whale Facts

Design Task - Great White Shark

Measurement: Perimeter

Measurement: Perimeter 2

Thursday: Writing Task

Great White Shark

On a hot and sunny day, me and my friend Kolotita went to the beach to
have a little swim. First we put on our togs with so much excitement and
jumped into the shallow water. First we went back up to the sand and ran
down the steep hill of sand so that we could splash into the water. We
could see the perfect sunset right behind us. But Then we saw something
that looked like a shark's fin. Then we heard something coming near us but
first I thought that it was just waves but then it got worse and turned into
big splashes. Then I felt something on my and which felt like sandpaper.
Then I went to the water and blocked my nose. Then I saw that it was a
Great White Shark. Then the Great White Shark also got my friend
Kolotita. Then the Great White Shark pulled us deeper into the ocean.

   

    The End